I submitted a final paper for my business and technical

I submitted a final paper for my business and technical writing class but I scored too low for passing. The instructor left me feedback on the paper and I need help fixing it so it can be passing. I have attached the assignment I submitted with the teachers comments on how to fix it. I have also attached the original assignment instructions she gave us.

 

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